Rhymes & Beats
Welcome to Rhymes & Beats. Create your account in order to access full features of this board and avoid ads. By creating an account you will be able to join a discussion or create your own topic for it.


NEPALIHIPHOP
©️2009-2013.

Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

View previous topic View next topic Go down

Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by rakim on Sun Jun 13, 2010 11:12 am

10 lines
due-24 hrs
no feeding
house rules
Explo
avatar
rakim
New Member

Posts : 29
Power Points : 34

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/3  (0/3)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by mark on Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:25 pm

checkmnm

mark
New Member

Posts : 18
Power Points : 18

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/0  (0/0)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by rakim on Sun Jun 13, 2010 10:01 pm

check
avatar
rakim
New Member

Posts : 29
Power Points : 34

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/3  (0/3)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by mark on Mon Jun 14, 2010 2:18 pm

you never were shit bitch, face it dog, you a ho
if you ever WERE an icon, you'da been uninstalled loong ago
Rakim's audio styles are weak, no one blasts dude's tracks
cuz his beats are so outta synch they ended up in the bathrooms trash
really I'll fuckin build you up 'n destroy you, this faggots a waste
I'll put this head on the map.. 'n then close the atlas over his face
'n I know you a faggot son, flamin herb, your stupid son
Rakim's mouth moistens more balls than the Rockies humidator does
he aint in touch with his feminine side, this flamers gone over
the boundries 'n harrased it to the point it got a restraining order

mark
New Member

Posts : 18
Power Points : 18

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/0  (0/0)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by rakim on Mon Jun 14, 2010 2:22 pm

Your punches are stupid.. least i make music you useless bitch
Lapping me? possibly.. cos your as* is on the runs more than fugitives
Your setup could be ya BROTHER, SISTER, MAM, DAD so face it
Cos' the Truth is ya punch is Science Creation.. it's not really related.
Mark you have to admit your probably the best at this shit
It's like your first lines a bitch.. nowhere to be seen with a punch or fist.
Fakin personals, think you'll win? well you need some coffee cat..
..Cos you did more than tip the scales, 50% thats your fucking body fat.
Mark's the incestual type off course smoking men and holding arse
Your mother calls you bogey for a reason.. cos your the 1 over par (pa, dad, you get it?! lol)
avatar
rakim
New Member

Posts : 29
Power Points : 34

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/3  (0/3)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by rakim on Mon Jun 14, 2010 2:27 pm

lets have some feedbacks and votes here!
avatar
rakim
New Member

Posts : 29
Power Points : 34

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/3  (0/3)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by Axiom on Tue Jun 15, 2010 7:21 am

Well in general, I have to say this battle was pretty weak. I was expecting a lot better from both of you.

Mark, your verse had some decent creativity in it. The first 3 bars punchlines weren't bad but also weren't hitting as hard as they could bar. The last 2 I was like "what's he trying to say?" Providing links in your text could give a general idea to what your trying to say in your bar, so the reader doesn't have to be like "wtf" and decide if it's dope or not. (I assume you already know how to do that) Overall, your punches were "ehh" and your 2nd bars wordplay helped out greatly.

Rakim, same thing, some 'ehh' creativity. Your punches really didn't connect as much as I would of liked. Your last bar actually had some FORCED wordplay in it. Just say the word "Par" and notice that it doesn't sound exactly alike like "Pa". That's a force/stretch in wordplay, avoid them

Vote: mark
avatar
Axiom
Member
Member

Age : 24
Posts : 66
Location : Los Angeles
Power Points : 72

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/0  (0/0)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by mark on Tue Jun 15, 2010 9:35 am

thanx for feedbacks..
uppin 1-0

mark
New Member

Posts : 18
Power Points : 18

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/0  (0/0)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by thelastniggaalive on Tue Jun 15, 2010 9:41 am

Rakim's audio styles are weak, no one blasts dude's tracks
cuz his beats are so outta synch they ended up in the bathrooms trash
really I'll fuckin build you up 'n destroy you, this faggots a waste
I'll put this head on the map.. 'n then close the atlas over his face
'n I know you a faggot son, flamin herb, your stupid son
Rakim's mouth moistens more balls than the Rockies humidator does


VS
Mark you have to admit your probably the best at this shit
It's like your first lines a bitch.. nowhere to be seen with a punch or fist.
Fakin personals, think you'll win? well you need some coffee cat..
..Cos you did more than tip the scales, 50% thats your fucking body fat.


The battle was kinda weak and none of you had some really harder hitting punches, however both of you seemed to have some creativity. But mark edges this battle
with Rockies humidator line.. That was sick..
V/mark

thelastniggaalive
Member
Member

Posts : 75
Power Points : 82

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/0  (0/0)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by Axiom on Thu Jun 24, 2010 8:29 am

Come on, it's 0-2

1 more vote.
avatar
Axiom
Member
Member

Age : 24
Posts : 66
Location : Los Angeles
Power Points : 72

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/0  (0/0)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by raga4death on Fri Jun 25, 2010 2:17 pm

really I'll fuckin build you up 'n destroy you, this faggots a waste
I'll put this head on the map.. 'n then close the atlas over his face

Vs nothing..

Like others said was really a weak battle.. but mark edged it with decent concepts..
Rakim your shit was a little bit forced.. Check wording..
No hate
Good battle both
V/mark
avatar
raga4death
Regular Member

Posts : 116
Location : CANADA
Power Points : 128

-----------------
Battle Record:
7/2  (7/2)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by Axiom on Fri Jun 25, 2010 8:08 pm

0-3 KO for mark
avatar
Axiom
Member
Member

Age : 24
Posts : 66
Location : Los Angeles
Power Points : 72

-----------------
Battle Record:
0/0  (0/0)

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Rakim Vs Mark (0-3 KO)

Post by Sponsored content


Sponsored content


Back to top Go down

View previous topic View next topic Back to top

- Similar topics

 
Permissions in this forum:
You cannot reply to topics in this forum