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In Remembrance of All Souls; Living and Beyond

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In Remembrance of All Souls; Living and Beyond

Post by sristy on Thu Dec 16, 2010 4:57 pm

When losing a loved one, we lose more than just one love
our immune systems shut down, heart's confused as it pumps blood
A pitch dark then consumes us, thoughts refusing to come up
as we part with illusion, only truth's left to hug us
Soon every part wants to move on, except in our own minds
we forget that we're human, and that death has its own time
In each breath that flows through us, we neglect that the road dies
but instead of us choosing, we must accept what our souls find
Whether in the heavens above, or the depths that await us
will we wake up as doves? or as devils in danger?
Will our wings lift us up? or be severed in breakers?
Finally be with those we love? or spend forever with strangers?
We pray for those who we've lost, our pain's evergrowing
maybe due to our thoughts, of not knowing where they're going
Who cares about funeral costs, when we're all better knowing
what's the truth about God, and if our wings're ever growing
Either if you choose to amuse it, forget or dismiss it
Are a Jew or a Muslim, a Catholic or Christian
We should honor our views, but then venture on living
and for those whom we knew, remember their existence
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Post by The Real P on Thu Dec 16, 2010 9:28 pm

Nice..flowed well and cool rhyme schemes..also i loved the imagery you had through out this shit..nice work..keep trying

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Post by sristy on Wed Dec 22, 2010 9:17 am

Thx for the feed pda
Lets get more in here
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Re: In Remembrance of All Souls; Living and Beyond

Post by area51 on Sat Dec 25, 2010 1:10 pm

Nicely written..
The composition was flawless for the characters and setups but it lacked complexity
Anyway this was good
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Post by The Real P on Tue Dec 28, 2010 5:59 am

Sometimes simplicity is wise than complexity..knamsain

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Re: In Remembrance of All Souls; Living and Beyond

Post by Hype on Wed Dec 29, 2010 11:17 am

When losing a loved one, we lose more than just one love
our immune systems shut down, heart's confused as it pumps blood
A pitch dark then consumes us, thoughts refusing to come up
as we part with illusion, only truth's left to hug us
Soon every part wants to move on, except in our own minds
we forget that we're human, and that death has its own time
In each breath that flows through us, we neglect that the road dies
but instead of us choosing, we must accept what our souls find
good set up at the begeing. regardless the flow was cool
Whether in the heavens above, or the depths that await us
will we wake up as doves? or as devils in danger?
Will our wings lift us up? or be severed in breakers?
Finally be with those we love? or spend forever with strangers?
We pray for those who we've lost, our pain's ever growing
maybe due to our thoughts, of not knowing where they're going
Who cares about funeral costs, when we're all better knowing
what's the truth about God, and if our wings're ever growing
Wow this is straight heat poetically Im feeling this
Either if you choose to amuse it, forget or dismiss it
Are a Jew or a Muslim, a Catholic or Christian
We should honor our views, but then venture on living
and for those whom we knew, remember their existence
The ending was dope too

dope shit man. I think your the first female in this site and perhaps the first one around nepali that made me amazed with her written.. The metas and similies were dope here and there and nice use of creative language..
Im eager to read your next drop
Stay postin
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