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Post by Meta4 on Thu Dec 16, 2010 5:34 pm

Souls sit forgotten.
Grow rotten and lost in
A twisted fiction of an image.
Arrange emotions into a sentence.
Across an ivory canvas
Sits an undamaged planet.
One with smiles and a lack of tears.
Walkes a child submerged in fears.
Scared not to be remebered by dinner time.
Impaired during decemeber while on a thinner line.
Walking the tightrope of death and life.
View through a microscope a breath from strife.
Willing to sacrifice himself for his family.
Can't find words to recite.. So he speaks randomly
Mumbles paragraphs with one lungs gasp.
Tumbled past my path while cutting my life in half.
Drug addiction loses attention and love.
Die unmentioned. While my soul falls from above.
Souls sit aflame, A shooting star that's lost.
Death from shame, pain and change.. Scars will ROT!
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Post by The Real P on Thu Dec 16, 2010 9:41 pm

Nice piece...was a bit creative but i felt like you were not good wit puttin ur imagery and the feelings completely here..lacked somethin..still nice try

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