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Planet Earth

Post by Mentalz on Sat Apr 10, 2010 4:47 pm

Planet Earth

If you arrive, that isn't your decision
You can be aborted or stored for living
In the beginning, adored, rewarded for age
Some supported by page
Others with bins to put their offspring in
Clinging, clawing, cawing;...from decor cages
Crayons squiggle, individual’s dreams drawn on pages
Dawn engages a new day..and mobiles dance,
A smile expands, and now the grown child stands

Dreams embark, parallel; the pain of terror chained together
This theme park has a special section named America
And everyone’s warned of the roller coaster when they're young
It’s a storm, and some get scared whilst others have fun.
Stars are born
Some only elated, others lonely dismal and bleak, but
Its down as parts are being relocated in the Middle East.

But if you’re willing to see others connected by spots
Children crammed in the crevices molested by frost
Lost, tongues lolling, hands holding stale bread
Cold coaxing the young, with death the only trail to tread
Then join the Ferris wheel,
Russia, in the summers snow,
Taken to dizzying heights then back down under below

The future of this, that’s soon to exist
Is established,
Microchip city, cocooned in abyss
Its ballooning, can they manage the cyst?
With the talent of consuming
In a concrete jungle inhabited with humans
Visit the safari… see the caged sapiens
Japan, boxed in, self harming - creating their pens

This is just a taste of this dismal place
It even gets worst, only serves certain individuals tastes,
Wallets, stop it? The axis is moving
Souls meander, and the patches of factories fuming.
What is this? Well I can tell your next if you haven’t been hurt
Our existence occurs in a theme park named the planet earth
And living has become a game; I’m not saying its right,
Cause its costly, when the entry fee is paying your life.

Planet Earth: Theme Park
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Re: Planet Earth

Post by Hype on Sat Apr 10, 2010 5:04 pm

This was way Fuckin Sick From top to bottom.. Illest shit man.. Pretty dope..
i enjoyed this read and i will def make sure that im goin to read anythin ya post in here..
The flow and Imagery of this piece Was Very Strong..
The Use Of vocab.. Lil here and Lil.. There made some difference
and on the package of those concepts.. This totaly combined make it a Dop shit..
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Post by chaos on Sat Apr 10, 2010 5:29 pm

Yeah this was the ever forutune combined in a single cookie.. yeah
nice use of imagery and Vocab in this piece.. Enjoyed reading.. nice shit.. Keep it up
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Post by titan on Sun Apr 11, 2010 9:14 am

Nice drop.. keep em coming..

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Re: Planet Earth

Post by Mentalz on Thu Jun 03, 2010 12:07 pm

Thanx for feeds..Uppin
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Re: Planet Earth

Post by area51 on Fri Jun 04, 2010 9:08 am

This was good.. God flow in the poetic script.. I Liked your presentation. Good shit. keep uppin
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Re: Planet Earth

Post by thelastniggaalive on Sat Jun 05, 2010 9:22 pm

nice read here.. really good imagery.. Top quality..

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